Ruby Rogers- story opening

I am learning to write a tory opening using dialogue

Ruby Rogers
"Hey Roger Roger ROGER stop messing around and help me fix this"yelled Ruby
"Ok fine I will help ok press that red butto..."yelped Roger
ZAP "AAAAAAHHHHHHH" yelled Ruby ZAP
"Ow that hurt! Ruby... RUBY where are you!!!?"said Roger to himself
"WALKING FLY TRAP!!!!!!!!!!!!!"screamed Ruby
"Oops fertalizer why do I even have that?"Roger said cautiously
"OH NO"Ruby screeched
... TO BE CONTINUED

SUCCESS CRITERIA: Speech Marks	I have used ✓	To be Achieved ✓
“ “ around the words spoken	yes
Start a new line for a new person	yes
Capital letter at the start of the speech	yes
Punctuation inside the speech marks e.g. ! ? . ,	yes
Used a comma if the speech is in the middle of the sentence	yes